Poem I wrote for a class project

[victim130]

The illustrious icecaps of a brilliant white
Heat causes you to drop in height
Many have tried to save you
But some say we may just have to say adieu

The wondrous rainforest of a brilliant green
How I wish you were left pristine
Untouched from the forestry industry
That cut you down horribly

The vast Ocean of a brilliant blue
What would we do without you?
Yet we still dump our waste
In the Ocean we must taste

The massive planet of all these colors
Oh how we mistreat your pleasures
One cannot hope to change this
But many can revert it to bliss

What do you think? Also any help with things that should be changed will be HIGHLY appreciated.

(Written by Brendan MacNab)

 

[Galaxial]

Brilliant piece, have you thought about adding a final stanza to which leave some form of rhetoric or something?
I think considering that this poem is almost a criticism on the world's outlook on environmental problems of the modern day, a final stanza which in one way or another says "By continuing with what you're doing to the planet, we'll kill ourselves in the process" would really tie the poem off for me

 

[trickshotwin]

Thanks god for rhymes schemes! I though that this line"But may revert it to bliss" was kind of strange, since bliss is one of the toP forms of satisfaction. Maybe replace it wit another synonym? Also, I think that I would be good to change ct you down to maybe another word?